YeahWrite Challenge #440 "My Humans" by Amy Irons

One day, I woke up from my snooze to find that my humans were gone. I picked myself up from the cold floor to check the rest of the house. I couldn’t smell them anywhere, and there weren’t any sounds. The little girl usually likes to sing, and I didn’t hear any of that. After I checked the entire house, even after climbing up the stairs, which was hard for my old hips, I decided that they weren’t home. Where could they be? I heard a small fly come from the outside, so I followed it to where it came from, realizing that I could get out. What if my humans were outside? I squeezed myself out of the house and was met by tall grass and a bunch of bugs. My mom human’s car wasn’t there, the one I like to ride in. Dad human’s car hadn’t been there for a long time, and I stopped smelling him. I lost him.

Knowing that my mom human and girl human were not there, I felt alone and unsure as to what I should do. So I sat down in the yard under the tall trees for a little while, thinking. After some time, my stomach made some weird noises and my mouth felt dry. I needed someone to give me some treats, and I needed to find them soon. When I looked up, the blue turned into gray and some mysterious wetness dropped on my head. Just then, I saw two humans in the next yard, so I made my way towards them. As I got closer to them, I saw their faces look startled because they had never seen me before. But they watched me come over to them, and they instantly knew that I was a good girl. They pet my head and said some things to each other. Next thing I knew, they took my necklace and walked me across the yard to their house. Then their mom human came out of the house and saw me. She said some things to the boy human and girl human and went back inside. She came back out with a bowl of wetness, something I like to drink. She also gave me some treats. It looked different from what I usually eat, but I was grateful. Then out of nowhere, above us made a big sound and the humans pulled me inside to escape the wetness that kept falling and falling.

The humans stayed with me through the sounds and the lights. I did not like those sounds and lights. I tried to close my eyes to make it stop. But the boy human and girl human sat down with me and both held me. The boy human pet my head and the girl human put her hand on top of mine. Slowly, I stopped crying and the warmth from the humans helped me feel less scared. The human girl’s legs were out in front of her, so I rested by head down to comfort her, too. Together, we got through the scary time. Little did I know that these kind humans would be my new human family. When my mom human and girl human came back, they took me to this house for good. Only, this time there were no sounds and lights.

I loved my new human family. They took me on walks until I told them I was all set for the day. They let me sleep in my human girl’s room on a comfy rug. They sat outside with me on nice days and pet me until I decided to take snoozes. And best of all, my new human dad took me on secret trips and gave me special treats. Trips in the car with him were my favorite.

Where I am now, I am not scared. There are no scary sounds and wetness never falls. My human family doesn’t see me anymore, but I always see them. Even though they don’t see me, I know that they still think of me when they see other good boys and girls. These humans gave me a second life that I never expected, and I hope that I made them smile as much as they made me.

Comments

  1. I could picture a cat telling this story and experiencing what the narrator describes. The ambiguity (at least to me) at the end is killing me! I've re-read it and am still not sure what to think. I don't want to believe that the animal is gone but that is what the clear take-away is.

    Bravo for making me pause and think as well as get feel emotionally invested in your narrator.

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  2. I absolutely loved the different perspective. It was refreshing to read something not from a human perspective. I want to know what happened to the original family!

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  3. Love that you took the dog's perspective! This is a very sweet story in the best way.

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  4. I love the fact that you've told this story through the dogs eyes, and the ending gave me chills. Love this whole piece.

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  5. The inclusion of :human: (the quote mark/apostrophe doesnt work on this computer) after mom and dad worked well to make a familiar concept unfamiliar. This feels similar to The Art of Racing in the Rain. Have you read it?

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    1. I haven't but I'll have to check it out! Thanks!

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  6. You're missing some closure here in this piece. Is the dad dead and gone and that's why this pet's old family just gave them away to I assume their neighbors? Is this creature supposed to be a dog or cat? I ask because that subtle distinction will make their seamless transition to a whole new family all that more believable. It;s these little details that make or break a piece for a reader. I say this because in all honestly, this piece left me really confused by the things that I just listed, making it harder to grasp it. Though I will say that the touch of "dad" human and "mom" human made this so much more believable.

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